April 12, 2016

  • Maelstrom

    At 4 o'clock this morning, I awoke from a dream, and this poem sprung to mind.  I knew that if I didn't write it down I'd lose it, so I got up and put it on paper.  I submit it here as my one entry for poetry month:

    Maelstrom

    Oh what a maelstrom we've created
    All the critters wanted to dance
    Like whirling dervishes
    And the salmon surfed on top

Comments (15)

  • I can picture it. Very good.

  • Thank you!

  • Yes. The subconscious mind is a place of endless imagination and inspiration!!

    • It does interesting thing, too, with conversations heard just at bedtime! I was pretty impressed with the linkages between the dream and this poem!

  • The image of surfing salmon is a joyous one. I'd love to see dancing herons, as well.

    • Surfing salmoon -- I had cedar planked salmon for dinner, which a friend named salmon on a surfboard! The imagery fit pretty nicely. Yes, I'd like the dancing herons too, but they weren't in this dream -- maybe next time!

  • Sometimes I like dreams. Other times not so much. Salmon are yummy . Salmon on a surfboard. A good mind picture. :)

    • That night I had cedar planked salmon for dinner -- salmon cooked in a hot oven on a small piece of cedar wood. It was so fresh and so flaky that it came to life as I tried to cut it, and a piece jumped off the plate right onto the floor -- you can't take me anywhere! That was the origin of the salmon on a surfboard, and probably for the rest of the dream too! Just a little bit of whimsy in the poem!

  • Good Morning, Janet.

    Loved this. I have seen news videos of surfers who were surfing with white sharks and did not know it.

    • A shark bumped a surfboard here in the last week or so, knocking the surfer off the board -- the guy hopped right back on and paddled like crazy to get to shore!

  • I think that's great to put your thoughts on paper and give yourself and others food for thought !I would love to see that-critters dancing .

    • Haha!! As I thought about this poem, though, I realized that it could lead the reader's thoughts in many directions!

  • some of my best thoughts for stories and poems surface at night. I love this poem Janet. I know you don't write much in way of poetry, and this is so beautiful.

    • @ZSA_MD: This poem feels so out of character for me! Remembering dreams, picking one word from a dream and building a poem around it, letting it be so silly -- all very unusual! I'm glad you like it -- that's quite a compliment -- thank you!

  • @slmret: That's just it! One word, one thought and then the cascade of other words and thoughts take birth. You have described it so well.

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